Who Wrote the Song Time and Again
#1 
MattBell
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 03:04 PM
Hey Champs, 
So, I don't know what to say...
This is my first song that I used fruity loops 6 by myself to produce. I love it, take a listen please! I think you will like it 
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You can find it at soundclick on this page Time And Time Again @ Soundclick
Lyrics:
It seems i've fallen down again;
could this really be the end;
is it to late to say i'm sorry;
do you think i'm telling the same old story.
I've said it time and time again;
But I don't wanna lose a friend;
I've said it time and time again;
But I don't wanna lose a friend.
I'm sorry for everything i've done;
i didn't mean to hurt anyone;
I know i've lost all your trust;
does this mean theres nothing left for us.
I've said it time and time again;
But I don't wanna lose a friend;
I've said it time and time again;
But I don't wanna lose a friend.
I can't see me living without you;
Theres nothing that I wouldn't ever do.
I've said it time and time again;
But I don't wanna lose a friend;
I've said it time and time again;
But I don't wanna lose a friend.
#2
Posted 20 May 2008 - 01:55 AM
My first impressions were that it sounded well produced and a bit like coldplay. Then your voice came in which sounds good and makes it sound like Hoobastank. Actually it really really sounds like Hoobastank. Not really my style but if you like that kinda thing pretty good.
#3
Posted 20 May 2008 - 02:49 AM
cool piano riff....I like the sound....sounds like a lot of soft American pop/so called punk rock............I have to admit I thought the lyrics were kind of unappealing and unnecessarily repetitive but I myself struggle at lyrics so I don't have much to say.......very well recorded tho I was impressed by that
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#4
CheapAdviceGuy
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Posted 21 May 2008 - 09:22 AM
I think this came out pretty great. You have a good sense of phrasing, and although the words do repeat a certain amount, (a) so do mine! and (b) in combination with this melody, it works. There are no awkward, out-of-place words or anything like that.
I did find myself wishing that the verse did not repeat the same chord pattern four times, cool though it is. Although your chords are fancier (good move), I am hearing the verse pattern as basically C#m - B - A - A. What if the third line were B - C#m - A - A (or some other variation) instead? You already are varying the melody a bit in that line, I wonder if something similar would work with a slight change in chords? Just a thought.
Arrangementwise, it would add interest if something besides the lead vocal had a melody line in certain places. As it is, all of the backing parts are "pattern" parts that establish the beat and chord sequence, which is fine, but maybe in the links (like between the chorus and the second verse) the keyboard could play a little "tune" instead of the pattern-type part? Kind of like the vocal hands off the "melody ball" to the keyboard, then takes it back for the verse. Again, just something to consider.
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#5
Posted 21 May 2008 - 09:41 AM
Your voice sounds like this generations radio pop. Good for you and the chicks who dig it (plenty, I'm sure). You know this is not a guy song, so you're brave posting all these cheesy love songs on this forum recently. You gotta lotta nerve kid, coming here and... he he.
Anyway, I'll comment on the recording: It's good. I like the piano. The synths hiding in the background are subtle and add tons to the song without anyone noticing it. My only gripe is that the piano dissapears a little bit when everything comes together, maybe not so much during the chorus, but I'd like to hear it more during the verses. My favorite part of the song was the hits on the strings on the "said it time and time again" the chords work well here, adding a bit of punch.
It's a good song I think, but yeah, not for the fellas.
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#6
Posted 21 May 2008 - 03:13 PM
This definitely sounds like track 4 on a Simple Plan disc. Fits right in with what you were going for... If I have one major criticism (besides WRITE SOME MAAAANLY MUSIC 
kidding.) it'd be turn the drums up. I can barely hear them in the chorus and bridge... Also, something else with the mix sort of bothers me... It seems like it pulses really loud on occasion, and, wearing headphones, it made me feel like my ears were popping.
Those two things are about all though. Sounds well-produced. What mic are you using for your vocals?
Edited by Weff Jebster, 21 May 2008 - 03:14 PM.
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#7
MattBell
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Posted 22 May 2008 - 08:15 PM
Holy Crap!, thats a lot of GOOD feed back Hahahah,
Yeah, Its time for some more manly tunes isnt it 
I use a MXL V63M Condenser Mic for my vocals,
and Thanks a lot to everyone whos been commenting, it really means a lot to me.
I WILL WRITE A MORE MANLY SONG SOON.
'Til Then Good day
#8
Posted 25 May 2008 - 12:14 AM
Your voice sounds like this generations radio pop. Good for you and the chicks who dig it (plenty, I'm sure). You know this is not a guy song, so you're brave posting all these cheesy love songs on this forum recently. You gotta lotta nerve kid, coming here and... he he.
I agree with the mantrasolo
I am really digging the opening, crystal clear piano and acoustic, nicely no nonsense pop opening. Top marks for that. I actually like how the piano completely disappears for the verses and only plays in the bridging parts between chorus and verse, as a comforting trademark of the part. However, mixing it up a little a bit would add additional interest. Perhaps an extended chorus with some more melodic carnage ? I love the staccato bouncy feel of the "I've said it time and time again"-part, makes you sit up and take notice.
Tiptop 
#9
MattBell
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Posted 25 May 2008 - 04:58 PM
Ahahaha Yeah I do have a lot Of nerve playing all this 'lovey dovey' music eh?
I mean Igor, your used to my 'racist' obscene songs ahah.
thanks a lot for all the great feed back, I'm glad that all of you ( for the most part ) enjoyed it.
But I can't help but notice that only the same people listen to and add comments to the songs here...
and yet there are so many members on this site....*sigh*
Oh well, Its better this way...Its easyer to get to know people and share more like a 'group'
thanks again
#10
Posted 25 May 2008 - 07:04 PM
I thought that it was pretty well produced. I really liked the piano riff at the beginning and after the chorus. I though your voice was pretty good. A little off in some parts, but overall I though you sounded pretty damn good. The lyrics weren't quite doing it for me. They are kind of cliched, but hey so are mine a lot of times.
Overall, solid song. I enjoyed the listen. So yeah, good job
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#11
Posted 25 May 2008 - 08:07 PM
Sorry for the bluntness of this post, i dont have enough time to 'fluff it up', hope you understand.
The song is cute. The lyrics are a little tacky and predictable. The vocals are a little bit on the winey side, I would avoid holding notes too long.
Well done on bringing it together on fruityloops, youve done a nice job there.
Thanks for sharing it with us, i enjoyed it & look forward to seeing more of your work.
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